Personal Statement... rough draft. Help trim the fat?

[TheLastStone]

I spent the day writing my personal statement. I feel like it's not complete but I'm well over the 5000 character mark. It's around 7000, I believe. If anyone would like to see it and possibly critique it/make edits, I'll appreciate any advice. 

I could have talked more about other things, like taking care of my grandfather for three years after his heart surgery and all, but this seemed more relevant towards approaching healthcare as a team. 

I've been looking at it too long, though. A fresh pair of eyes would help, thanks.

PA personal statement.docx

[ajames]

Hey Michael,

I'll take a look at it. You can PM me your email so I can send it back to you. Thanks!

[TheLastStone]

Hey Michael,
I'll take a look at it. You can PM me your email so I can send it back to you. Thanks!

pm sent! Thanks again James!


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