Final Draft Help

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So I worked very hard on this final draft, I know it isnt the best personal statement out there but ive always had a hard time writing about myself. I know what I want to write and I do have a strong desire to become a PA but writing on paper is very difficult for me... any advice or feedback would be great because I am looking to submit it before Nov 1st.

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            Walking into the Good Samaritan hospital that December morning I had no idea what to expect. Little did I know I was entering an experience that would change my life forever. It was my first day shadowing a PA in a hospital emergency room and I was as nervous as ever before. Prior to this I’ve never experienced any medical treatments up close. As soon as I put the white coat on I felt a sense of relief. It just felt natural.  Throughout the day, I followed and assisted the PA which consisted of seeing patients who were either sick with the flu or were fighting off a stomach bug. Later into the day a young woman came in who cut off half of her finger the night before while cooking. This pivotal moment will stick with me forever. She seemed nervous and scared about her situation. The PA was reassuring and compassionate towards her, doing everything in his will to distract her from the pain she was feeling. Next thing I know the PA is stitching up her finger right then and there in the ER as I stood next to him and assisted. I remember him even saying to me “If you can handle this, then this field is for you”. Since then that statement has been embedded in my mind. This simple statement gave me the encouragement that I was truly meant to pursue the medical field. Not just because I was able to watch him perform the treatment, but also because I actually could picture myself in his shoes at that moment. Coming back to shadow and assist each day just inspired me more and more to become a PA. I wanted to be able to apply my passion for the medical field to the treatment each patient received.

            Personable treatment is a foundation of the PA medical practice; this allows the patients and their families to develop a trusting relationship with their health care provider. Personally, this is one of the main reasons why I feel so strongly for the necessity of PAs in the medical field. I have dealt with irritable bowel syndrome for the past two years and have struggled to find a doctor who was willing to personalize my treatment. After finding the right gastrointestinal specialist, one of the PAs in their office sat down to speak with me and helped me find a solution to my problem. These past memories truly inspired me to practice medicine as a PA. While though the main goal is to focus on treating the symptoms for the patient, PAs go the extra mile to do so while keeping the patients best interest at heart.

            Most people ask, “why not go to medical school?” For me the answer is easy, I wholeheartedly want to become a physician assistant. I appreciate the flexibility in their field and the huge role that they play in the health care system. Being able to specialize in more than one field without having to go back for additional schooling provides many more opportunities for growth and exploration in my future career. Attending a PA program is far more than just gaining knowledge about biomedical and clinical science. It’s main focus and purpose is to develop dynamic interpersonal and communication skills in their students so that they will be able to provide proper patient-centered care.  I have realized that there is a high demand and necessity for PAs from my prior experiences within the health care field, and I feel I can contribute in various ways to this well-respected profession.