ckl257 Posted July 25, 2012 Share Posted July 25, 2012 this is my first draft but please help by reading over, commenting, and suggesting which parts are extraneous and can be cut out! thank you in advance! --- i am revising and will repost my updated one Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tamhle824 Posted July 25, 2012 Share Posted July 25, 2012 I loved it. You know exactly what it takes to be a PA and the differences between each medical fields. The experiences are great and tells a lot about your determination and interest as a PA. I liked the conclusion where it ties in with the intro. I noticed you mentioned autonomy a lot. (Just an observation). I think some things in the intro could be cut to make it more clear. Your main points and clutch statements is experience and passion for the profession. Overall, amazing job for first draft. When do you apply? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ckl257 Posted July 25, 2012 Author Share Posted July 25, 2012 thank you so much! i am applying this cycle.. everything is done except for this narrative! i did notice the autonomy part is repetitive.. and i do need to still cut out 1000 characters thank you for your comments! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tamhle824 Posted July 26, 2012 Share Posted July 26, 2012 :) my last thing is narrative as well. Good luck this cycle! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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