Wanting to Sound "Different"..Criticism for my PS, Please?

[malamed]

I wanted to write a very honest and comprehensive essay, but I feel like I MAY be covering too many large things.. But i want it to get across that I am very diverse..What do you guys think?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Being the fourth in line in a series of four girls, born to a former actress and a musician father, drama was a bit of a given. For much of my young life I honed these talents participating in choir and musicals. It was also during my very young life, that my older sister started experiencing serious psychological turbulence. This affected me deeply, sparking a fascination with healing. As she went through an ugly diagnostic process, I felt an innate desire to know more about psychology and the mental health realm in general.  While I once spent my time singing and dancing, I now spent it scouring books for more information hoping I could help my sister. This experience may seem like a nightmare to most people, but to me, it resonates as a game changer.

College was spent charting my real course into medicine. Having never even taken a chemistry class, I was very intimidated at first and I immediately noticed I had to catch up to par. While many of my friends were at parties and the beach, I was giving my last pennies over to tutors and making the library my second and third home. 

There were countless opportunities available to me during college and I took advantage of as many as I could. In between the books, I held a night job to pay for school and danced for the Wilmington Sea Dawgs Semi Professional basketball Dance and Cheer Team. This enabled me to work for and also connect with my community. Lifeguarding every summer and coordinating relief efforts in the hurricane Sandy aftermath has further empowered me as a person capable of streaks of heroism when called.

I flourish living with a busy, fast-paced schedule, complete with challenges. For six months, I shadowed at Wilmington Orthopedic. Being given the opportunity to shadow a different PA every week, I was rapidly exposed to new material. I shadowed PAs, MDs, Pain Specialists, Physical Therapists, and even the Radiologist. After witnessing several clinical rotations and x-rays, I became very interested in the surgical aspect of orthopedics. Seeing the Physician Assistants come into the office fresh out of surgery captivated me, so at the end of my shadowing experience, I asked to shadow some surgical procedures. In two weeks, I was scrubbed in at the corner of a surgical room in New Hanover hospital in absolute awe. I was completely inspired. This was it; I had discovered my true passion was in surgery. Everything I was working so hard for was truly worthwhile.

Another monumental moment of self-growth happened during a Birthright trip to Israel. Together with 50 of my peers, I experienced an eye opening and powerful journey that led me to connect with an ancient and current culture. From floating in the Dead Sea to sleeping in Bedouin tents in the desert, this trip opened a gigantic window of self reflection. Israel showed me a different perspective of the world and helped me blossom as a student as well as a person.

Following graduation, I continued to hone my path toward a medical career. After becoming a Certified Nursing Assistant, I received an immediate job offer at Primary Medical Care as a medical assistant.  This job is a dream come true to someone who is climbing towards a career in medicine. Working alongside the PA and doctor, I see the value of the collaborative relationship and how these trained providers work together to provide the best possible patient care.  

One of my favorite things about the office is the diverse patient population. We see all different kinds of people with diverse medical ailments, from many walks of life. Establishing a meaningful, well-rounded medical relationship with my patients is paramount to ensuring a positive medical experience. Coupling this with my colorful personality sets me apart from other ordinary medical professionals.  Making people feel comfortable while they are in a vulnerable setting comes natural to me. Becoming part of the diagnostic and treatment process would further allow me to utilize my skills and expand my passion for medicine.

Bravery is not something that’s really learned, it is gained through repeated exposure to something that’s worth having courage for. It takes bravery to be a P.A.  The climb towards success has not been without obstacles, but my persistence and alacrity is limitless. I am exponentially more than my numbers. My ability to dig deep, do the work that it takes, and connect with my vision, makes me an asset to any medical team and also in the classroom. My passion is and always will be in medicine, no matter where my path takes me, but I hope it’s to reach my potential as a future Physician Assistant.

 

[malamed]

that bad?? anyone? please??

[ehubbs]

I think it's very good and if I were an admissions director I would want to meet you. I don't think you cover too much. There is probably some language you could clean up here and there.

[G. Davenport]

Hi Malamed.

 

I rarely comment on these things because they are always laced with propaganda. And re written because someone here said something. I simply don't believe them.

 

As a parent of a 22 y/o who is 100% wheel chair bound and functions at a 2y/o. As a parent of a child with osteogenesis imperfecta. As the parent of a child who had major surgery at 3 weeks old. (Yes, that's me). I don't care about an applicants embellished past.

 

What has it motivated you to do? Apply to pa school? That's not enough!

 

What do you plan to do when you graduate? Medical mission? Volunteer at free clinic? Meet a need? That's what I care about.

 

And if you write it, your volunteerism, etc better support it.

 

 

G

 

 

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