choco86 Posted June 1, 2013 Share Posted June 1, 2013 Please advice me on my 1st draft! It still needs a lot of editing and would like your opinions! I am currently over the limit at 5,500 characters. What do you guys think I can take out? Thanks in advance! “We, the jury, find the defendant, John Smith, not guilty of aggravated sexual assault of a child.” As soon as the not guilty verdict was read, I sat in the courtroom, still and silent. The only thoughts running through my mind were of all the late nights spent at the office for the last several months, and that they had finally come to an end. Soon after the verdict was read, my client’s family came one by one and thanked us for our work. Still emotionless even as I was giving my client’s daughter a hug, I looked over her shoulder to the other side of the courtroom. The mother of the child buried her daughter’s face in her bosom, rocking her back and forth as she cried silently.]As I drove home from court that day, I was unable to erase the image of the mother and her child from my mind. Usually after a victory in a long, brutal case, I would indulge myself to some of the finer pleasures in life and reassure myself that my decision to become a lawyer had been the right one. However, this time was different. My client was given a second chance at life that day, but in exchange for that precious gift an equally precious part of someone else’s life was taken away. My goal in life was to have a career where I could use my education to help those in need. However, thinking about the child’s family, I felt as if I was doing more harm than help. Therefore , after several months of soul searching, I finally decided to take a year off from the practice of law in order to truly focus on the principles in my life and how to use my education to add value to the lives of others. In order to start again from the beginning, somehow, I landed in South, Korea. Looking back, I think it was fate and faith that took me there. There, I worked in an underserved community and taught English to middle school students. At first I was skeptical about staying since it seemed as if I was going nowhere. However, as I stood in front of the class for a year and saw my students who were always eager to learn, I began to realize that I, too, wanted to be sitting in those seats again—learning. Suddenly, I remembered that I had always loved learning and using what I learned to help others. Now, my next step was to discover the field in which I wanted to learn. While I was teaching at the middle school, I started to teach English for working adults on the side. It was a completely different experience since my students ranged from priests to pilots to doctors. It was while teaching conversational English to doctors that I was first introduced to the world of medicine. The doctors talked about their purpose for going into medicine and how much of a rewarding career it was. Instantly, I was interested in medicine and wanted to dig deeper. Then, as if by fate, one of my students told me about a volunteer opportunity that was seeking someone to translate between doctors and English-speaking patients. I started to volunteer once a week at different small clinics located in the industrial suburbs of Korea. These areas had high populations of illegal immigrants with poor working conditions. Although these foreigners got injured at work, they were not able to get proper medical treatment due to their immigration status. Therefore, when we met with these patients, they were extremely grateful for our help. I was fascinated to see all the doctors, nurses and other staff members working together for each individual patient. Although I was only a volunteer, it was gratifying and rewarding to know that I played even a small part in helping others. When the patients came to me after getting treated to thank me for helping them, I felt a completely different feeling than the one I had experienced couple of months ago in the courtroom. I was elated, I was happy, and I was fulfilled. Now I know that medicine is the field in which I want to learn more and use my knowledge to help others, I also researched the area of medicine in which I wanted to practice. While discussing this topic with my family and friends back in the states, practicing as a physician assistant (PA) came up. My first encounter with a PA was at my own doctor’s office, and I remember that she was able to diagnose and prescribe medication. She was very concerned with my health and even gave me a follow up call to make sure I was continuing my treatment plan. I continued to research what it meant to be a PA, and I was intrigued by their profession and scope of practice. The autonomy and broad range of specialties offered while working with a team of medical professionals to increase the quality of patient care was exactly what I was looking for. I feel blessed to have finally found a profession that I fall more in love with each day. It feels great to be sitting in a lecture hall, learning new things. To further advance my health care career, I started a clinical volunteer internship at St. Francis hospital. As a Clinical Care Extender, I am a member of a patient care team who helps support the hospital staff and medical professionals to increase the quality of patient care. Thus far, I have observed surgeries and participated in basic patient care such as taking vital signs, bathing, changing and feeding patients on different rotations. While shadowing many different medical staff, I learned to recognize that the patient is the most important member of the patient care team. As a PA, I will be part of a patient care team that remembers to put all of our patients first. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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