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I am looking into getting some help editing my personal statement.  I've done some online searches but there are so many different options and I am nervous about choosing one that is too gimmicky.  I also intend to have my pre-pa advisor, a former english teacher, and a PA I know personally look over it for me.  However, I would additionally like some feedback from someone who has first hand experience with exactly what admissions panels are looking for in a personal statement.  If you've used an editing service, who was it and would you recommend them?  Thanks!

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I just used the help of others on this board for the editing of my PS 🙂  I would say that you've got plenty good sets of eyes looking at your PS. Unless they tear your PS to shreds, I would say you don't need to worry about shoveling money out for one of the editing services. If even after those people take a look at your PS and you still don't feel confident in it, feel free to send it to me or post it on this forum. There's plenty of members here who have also served some kind of role on the board of admissions and of course, plenty of accepted students who know what admissions are looking for!

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