MaNamezJeff Posted January 4, 2019 Share Posted January 4, 2019 Hello all! These past few cycles have had increasing numbers of applicants so I attempted to stand out from the crowd with a poem for my personal statement. Is it unprofessional and, "bad taste" or original and unique enough to land some interviews? Any and all feedback is appreciated -Jeff- I appreciate you reading this and I value your time I don’t want to bore you, so I wrote up a rhyme My life until now has been very exciting Admissions committees are tough so here I am fighting This topic is quite dull and not very exciting But for you who must read all these applicant’s writing I decided to write this with words that may rhyme So, you can get an idea of what I did with my time I’ve got a disease they named Crohn’s and it hurts in my bones It can attack the whole gut, from the mouth to the butt It’s got some weird symptoms, this autoimmune So, relax, take a seat while I sing you this tune I can eat all I want but I’m still losing weight People say, “Wow, I’m jealous, for me that’d be great” They say they’d switch places to lose some weight too Everyone is an expert, self-labeled, “Guru” I was Taking steroids, but not getting big I eat so much food some might call me a pig Prednisone I can condone but it made me look fat Cortisol after all had results that fell flat I’ve been through so much with these scars that I’ve earned But it’s just another chapter in this page that I’ve turned The story is far from over in this book of my life But it hasn’t been easy, filled with pain and with strife Two years of my life spent just sleeping and crying This wasn’t living it was simply occupying This body was defective, was I missing directions? When God made me this body that needed corrections Diagnosed at eighteen weighing ninety-one pounds I lived in the E.R where (PAs) did their rounds Ruptured colon, high fevers I quickly turned sceptic I almost died twice, man this Crohn’s thing was hectic Intensive Care Unit six weeks and a day I decided I wanted to be a PA To help people one day who were sick just like me Young, old, rich, poor or as broke as could be Four surgeries later and a bag for good measure I made it through that hell so it’s my life that I treasure Eight months later the bag was reversed I went right into studying I jumped in headfirst I’ve got joy that’s contagious, friends don’t understand The blessings I’ve got so I’m writing freehand Second chances at life do not happen each day It’s impossible to hide this joy I display Eight years have gone by, in remission at last Some say that time flies when we look back on the past I’m stronger than ever before all the doctors agree Standing here weighing in at one forty-three College took seven years, I was first generation Lots of ups and some downs but I had this fixation Physician assistant one day I would be This job, not the title would be my grand prix Received my bachelor’s degree, it was quite celebrated Because even though it was more than belated Two jobs, Crohn’s and class just to mention a few Were what it would take for this dream to ensue Health and fitness are my passions, I love to workout Discipline is what it takes I don’t want a handout I work hard in all I do I am very consistent So that I may succeed as a Physician Assistant Number two of nine kids seven younger than me I love my big family and I think you’d agree I’m an ambitious, dedicated, team-oriented student I can continue this praise, but it might not be prudent If you accept me today to work towards a PA I’ll give it all that I’ve got so please don’t delay I’ll work hard and learn fast helping doctors succeed Because I’m one of a kind, you might say a rare breed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lctexas4 Posted January 4, 2019 Share Posted January 4, 2019 This is very creative and 100x better than any poem I could write, but honestly I think it would be super risky to do this...hopefully someone who’s worked in admissions could chime in here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beattie228 Posted January 4, 2019 Share Posted January 4, 2019 It's certainly creative, and you have a very interesting story for what attracted you to the PA field. As someone who reviews and grades admission essays, a poem is too far off of the beaten path in my opinion. My honest first thought if this were submitted to me for review would be "this person failed to read the actual essay prompt". There's a lot of room for creativity with the personal narrative, but it should really be in true essay form. That said, there's usually an interesting piece of literature or prose at the end of the JAAPA, the Journal of the Academy of PAs. You should consider submitting this once you've successfully interviewed (published as MaNamezJeff, PA-S) for that publication. All the best. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
UGoLong Posted January 8, 2019 Share Posted January 8, 2019 I personally wouldn't recommend it. The goal is to give a slice of yourself, not so much a performance. I think it would be like sending a video of you doing an interpretive dance. The PANCE folder for each individual is large and full of numbers. The only things that the reviewer see that presents a slice of what the applicant is like are the essay and the letters of recommendation. Your poem, though entertaining and heart-felt, doesn't give me enough of a view of who you actually are. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JohnT Posted January 10, 2019 Share Posted January 10, 2019 Certainly not recommended. Stick to explaining from the heart your desire to become a PA and why you chose PA over any other profession in health care. I would be off-put as a person on the admissions board if I were to be reading a poem regardless of how poignant it may be. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ejohns20 Posted January 14, 2019 Share Posted January 14, 2019 I love this so much - made my day. I do feel like I got to know you, your personality, a bit of your story and what really drives you. I've got no experience to add on whether you should submit it or not, but I wanted to chime in and say how impressed I am. If you decide not to submit for your app, I'd love to see you do something else with it - maybe published like Beattie suggested! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MaNamezJeff Posted January 19, 2019 Author Share Posted January 19, 2019 Thank you all for taking the time to read this. I really appreciate the feedback and critiques. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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