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Hi does anyone have tips for a strong conclusion? I feel like when reading my essay it starts off strong and connects well with why I want to be a PA but my conclusion very weak. I tried looking through the forum where someone provides tips for this specific area but I could find anything.

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The conclusion should just tie everything together. Briefly hit the big points you've made and explain that they have all led you to want to become a PA or why they would make you an excellent PA. I know that may sound weak, but that's the rule of thumb. If it makes you feel better, I feel like by the time they reach that conclusion, adcoms should already know whether or not they want to give you an interview.

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Make it short and sweet. I wouldn't mention your skills - this should be done throughout the statement and to do it again in the conclusion would just waste precious characters. Make conclusion for medical school personal statement short and simply sum up why your experiences make you want to study medicine.

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Feel free to post or send a draft! I ended with some broad summarizing statements and then a sentence that tied together the overall theme. 

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