What do you think about my introduction? Thanks

[notamimic]

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[smgimie108]

Couple of things

- watch out, its physician ASSISTANT

-  I think your intro should only discuss art and your love for piano. You've included too many things at once so it feels like you're cramming an entire personal statement in one paragraph

[notamimic]

Couple of things

- watch out, its physician ASSISTANT

-  I think your intro should only discuss art and your love for piano. You've included too many things at once so it feels like you're cramming an entire personal statement in one paragraph

Yes I know that is is Physcian assistant, but the school that I am applying for is Physician Associate. and thanks for the advice. im still working on it :)

[UGoLong]

It takes a bit too long for us to meet you in your intro. Readers only have so much patience...