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Louisnlife Posted May 11, 2016 Share Posted May 11, 2016 dyang...For whatever reason I felt drawn to your essay. I understand your from China, and probably have to put forth the extra effort to word your essay just how you want. Even I have problems and I born here in America. Anyway overall a compassionate and personal account. The only thing is grammatical errors throughout the essay. Let me know, and if you want I can let you know what areas need fixing. For example, first sentence of 2nd paragraph should say "my beloved family and I". Lot of little things like that. Dont give Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dyang8 Posted May 11, 2016 Author Share Posted May 11, 2016 dyang...For whatever reason I felt drawn to your essay. I understand your from China, and probably have to put forth the extra effort to word your essay just how you want. Even I have problems and I born here in America. Anyway overall a compassionate and personal account. The only thing is grammatical errors throughout the essay. Let me know, and if you want I can let you know what areas need fixing. For example, first sentence of 2nd paragraph should say "my beloved family and I". Lot of little things like that. Dont give Hi, thank you so much for your feedback. I know I probably have a lot of grammar mistakes. I just want to make sure the overall message sounds good before I started to work on my grammers. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Louisnlife Posted May 12, 2016 Share Posted May 12, 2016 Good start your on the right track Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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