Topsy helped me a ton and is starting school tomorrow, so in case he/she can't get back to you lemme just pay it forward and offer my thoughts as I was reading your essay.
When I set foot inside the oncology department, I wasn’t too sure about how I would like it. I’d been After watching medical documentaries and television shows for twelve years, and I had my heart set on surgery. But as a high school student Unfortunately, getting into the hospital’s internship program as a high school student was hard enough, and the operating room wasn’t an option. I learned so much In in my first week, I learned so much, but I was still unsure of whether or not oncology would should be something I would to pursue (This sentence seems unnecessary because you previously mentioned you had your heart set on surgery; I think it should be deleted if you need more room to write). I got to sit in on sat in on scheduled appointments with the radiation oncology department, shadowing both nurses and doctors. Towards the end of my first month there, Once I had the opportunity to talk with some patients in the waiting room, while they were waiting for their treatments And that’s when it. my trajectory in medicine changed. all changed for me (I think you should be more specific with the “it” that changed for you, so I reworded the sentence). There was something special about these patients, something I had never seen in other specialties areas of medicine (Can you really compare patients to other specialties? You haven’t mentioned your experience talking to patients in surgical specialties, which is what you were interested in at first).
Optimism. Hope. Courage. These people were determined to give their all, no matter how rough the road would get for them. They knew were informed of their statistics, of their odds of survival and of their grueling treatment plans.. They knew that the treatments were grueling, and Despite the inevitably tough road faced by them and their loved ones, they showed up to their appointments ready to fight as hard as they could to defy the odds given to them. would not be easy for them or for their loved ones. But they showed up for their appointments, ready for what was being thrown their way. They understood what was going to happen, and how their lives would change. And they ready to fought as hard as they could to defy the odds that were given to them. (a lot of these statements were repetitive so I combined a few) These patients gave me hope and courage for my future, and I started to realize that if they could face something as utterly terrifying as cancer, I could face my biggest fears as well. In Throughout my six months that I spent as an intern interning in the oncology department and the years I returned there as a volunteer, I slowly but surely fell in love with the field of oncology. (From “….something I had never seen in other specialties…” to the end of this paragraph, I think the whole idea suggests that you wouldn’t care about patients with other types of medical/terminal conditions because you don’t think they have “optimism, hope, courage.” Maybe reword the transition.)
I had never considered really thought much about becoming a Physician Assistant (PA) until I had requested a job shadowing opportunity at a shadowed a local oncology practice. On the day that I arrived, (sorry I had to link it; immediately popped in my mind as I read that) instead of being greeted by the main physician at the practice, I met the PA that worked there. She greeted me, and Although I knew little about the PA profession, I learned a lot in that eight-hour day. I sat in on various procedures and appointments, all of which she performed and took care of without batting an eyelash. Meanwhile, the physician was in his office, writing out notes and making phone calls. It was then that I really discovered how much better suited I would be for a PA program rather than for medical school. (These last two sentences give me the impression that you think a doctor only ever sits in his office to write out notes and make phone calls. Maybe describe that you know that physicians can also provide patient care, except they spend MORE time in their office than PAs do.. or something like that. However, I’m not sure if that statement is even true for the PA profession).
Being a very hands-on person, I often thought I wanted to become an artist (this is a sudden topic to bring up. Also, I thought after 12 years of watching medical shows you had your heart set on surgery?) I loved the precision and execution of doing something on my own- but I also valued communicating with others. I loved helping people, but I could never see myself as a teacher (teacher? I thought we were talking about you wanting to be an artist). I loved lending a hand when needed, and especially loved to help people feel better. Which is why I ended up considering becoming a surgeon. (oh I see, we’re going through how you narrowed down your decision to become a PA.) The hands-on experience that I craved, coupled with my passion for helping people steered me in the direction of medicine. I still have a pretty intense interest in surgery, due to these reasons. However, while shadowing the PA, I realized that she performed in-office procedures, such as bone marrow biopsies, which fascinated me as well. (I think this whole paragraph can be deleted or at least redone with a better transition and also more in depth reasons why you switched from Artist à teacher à surgeon à PA; as it stands, it is not very convincing)
To help me prepare for becoming a PA, I obtained my certifications as both an Emergency Medcial Technician and a Certified Nursing Assistant. (Describing specifically how these jobs have helped you prepare for becoming a PA would be helpful - E.g. ability to adapt and work in stressful environments as an EMT, ability to handle patients delicately as a CNA) Most recently, I worked at a Girl Scout Summer Camp as their health director, taking care of both children and staff members who were sick or injured. I had to think quickly to address issues with both children and adults, and I had to make vital decisions on whether or not a health concern in a camper or staff member could be taken care of in our health center, or if further, specialized medical attention was necessary (see, these are good examples from your girl scout expereince.). I took vitals, and learned how to perform basic exams on patients who came in on the first day of camp. I also obtained Medication Administration Certification training, and I was authorized to give medications to children as directed. Working in this setting was both an amazing and rewarding experience. I also gained valuable leadership and critical thinking skills, as I had to make decisions fairly quickly and take initiative in all cases. It even gave me a newfound interest in both pediatrics and in primary care, in addition to my interest in surgery and oncology.
For someone like me, I believe that Becoming a PA is the right decision for me because of my passion for helping others, as well as my sincere interest in oncology, surgery, pediatrics and primary care. many different fields in medicine. I am a very hands-on person who enjoys working on her feet and solving puzzles and mysteries, especially when it comes to patients. I am also very good at following directions, and I respect figures of authority, which is an important aspect of being a PA (I am indifferent about mentioning these things as skills to highlight, because it doesn’t take much effort to follow directions or to respect figures of authority). I also crave the expansive options that PAs have once they graduate; I won’t ever be stuck in the specialty that I choose (being “stuck” in a specialty has a very negative tone that contrasts with your interest in specific fields that you elaborated on earlier, so I would take it out and replace it with this last sentence, which has a more positive spin on it) I’ll have the freedom to explore my varied interests and put my skills to good use.
I understand the sacrifices that I will have to make for my career, but there is nothing in the world I would rather do. I am a firm believer in the quote, “Choose a job you love, and you will never have to work a day in your life.” And that is my goal.