bnavin6 Posted September 12, 2016 Share Posted September 12, 2016 . Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
whalia Posted September 14, 2016 Share Posted September 14, 2016 I have read in a few places that you should not say, I've been waiting to do this since I was 5. Although you tried to steer away from that, the wanting to be a PA since high school is a bit close to that taboo. It may be true that, that is when your interest sparked but that is what hundreds of other essays will say. I LOVE the part in your conclusion about you still fulfilling your teaching desires because PAs teach their patients. To me it was unique and so true. You should get more opinions before you listen to me though. I am just a PA school second time applicant. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bnavin6 Posted September 15, 2016 Author Share Posted September 15, 2016 Thanks so much! I will definitely get more people to look at it(: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blinchuck607 Posted September 20, 2016 Share Posted September 20, 2016 A little wordy in the first paragraph, I would try and trim it to be more succinct. Otherwise, great job tying in a past passion into a newly desired career path. Also, don't say cliché things like "...when middle school hit..." Say something like, "Upon reaching middle school, I experienced a major change in my desired career path..." Good luck! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GeoffreySchwab Posted October 10, 2016 Share Posted October 10, 2016 Hey! It's a really good personal statement even though there are a few flaws that were brought to attention in previous answers. I personally really like the way you talk about patients. But I've got an advice for you. Don't put your personal statement on internet like this. It can be easily detected to be plagiarized by an admission committee. Ask on forum if someone is willing to give you a feedback and than send a message to a person with attached document. Or use personal statement revision service because usually they guarantee confidentiality. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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